The True Story of Peter Pan from the Iron Hook Captain’s point of view
- 作者： Angela Lim Ching Yung
- 寫作年級：
- 寫作日期： 2009-12
- 學校： Hong Kong And Macau Lutheran Church Ming Tao Primary School
Everybody knows the story of Peter Pan but nobody knows the real story. Nobody has ever heard my side of the story. I’m the Iron hook Captain. The real story is about Peter Pan, a group of children and me.
Way back in once upon a time, I caught all the children. It was because I was playing hide-and-seek with them. They liked playing with me very much! We played happily!
As I know that Peter Pan liked chocolate jam, I wanted to put the chocolate jam in the cake. However, I was so careless, I put some poisonous jam in the cake.
I am not a bad man. I did many things because they’re good for the group of children and Peter Pan. Therefore, I am a good, kind, friendly, nice but careless captain.
老師評語
This is a piece of creative writing with good and interesting ideas.
You have written many
good connectives e.g. Then, so, because, However, Therefore, but
good adverbs e.g. happily,
good adjectives e.g. careless, poisonous, kind, friendly, nice
good phrases e.g. Way back in once upon a time,
good vocabulary e.g. playing hide-and-seek