A letter on helping people
- 作者: Tsoi Tsz Ying ,Jess
- 寫作年級: P6
- 寫作日期: 2009-3-15
- 學校: Lok Sin Tong Lau Tak Primary School
Dear Sarah,
How are you this weekend? In this weekend, I came across an unforgettable happening. Last Saturday, I went to the library in order to find some information about the project ‘fruit and healthy’
When I was waiting for the lift, there was a mischievous boy playing with a water gun. There were puddles of water on the floor. However, I did not pay attention to him. I just stood quietly. Before long, the lift arrived. I went to it and the little boy followed. He was shooting water out of the gun continuously. So the lift was very wet and slippery. I was in rage. But I still had to bear him.
At the meantime, the lift opened the door. We went out and there was an old woman coming out of the lift. Abruptly, she slipped on the floor. At that moment, I went forward to uprear her at once. The little boy was ashamed of his behaviour. He helped us and said sorry to us. Fortunately, she was not hurt but a bit bruised. And she thanked us for our kindness.
Have you helped people? Please tell me.
Love
Jess
老師評語
The content of this writing is really interesting. Have you ever thought of trival matters that happen around us? I think Jess is a thoughtful person who looked into things explicitly. Her choice of words and phrases like 'puddles of water', 'mischievious' and ' rage' hightlight the lines and paragraphs with a real picture. Furthermore, the ending of the story ends with a positive behaviour which gives us a correct attitude to life.