A robbery report
- 作者: Huang Yi Yu, Christine
- 寫作年級: P6
- 寫作日期: 2009-3-6
- 學校: Lok Sin Tong Lau Tak Primary School
Yesterday, a robbery occurred in an antique shop in Mong Kok. The owner of the shop said that he had lost two pearl necklaces, three gold bangles and five silver rings. When the police received the order, they investigated into this robbery at once.
The police checked the record from the closed-circuit television in the antique shop. They saw a pair of couples entered the antique shop at six o’clock in the evening. Then, the thieves walked and glanced around the shop for 10 minutes. They were so sneaky. The man helped the woman to cover up her crime. That was their larceny technique. The police confirmed that they were the thieves.
The first thief was a woman who had a round face and thin eyebrows. She was with long, straight hair and a golden leather handbag. Moreover, she was in a spotted long dress and a striped jacket. The woman put all the stolen things into her handbag.
Another suspect was a man with a moustache and sunglasses. He has short, curly hair and a scar on his face. In addition, he was in a vest plus a red coat and jeans. The man was in fact hiding the action for the woman in order to steal things.
Now, the police could positively certify that the pair of couples were the thieves. They had enough evidences to confirm all their crimes. This case was closed. The police could catch the thieves ultimately. And the police will give all the things to the owner of the antique shop.
老師評語
Christine is a careful writier. She chooses couples of vocabulary to brighten the content. She uses the cohensive words such as 'In addition' and'Moreover' wisely throughout the passage. Her passage is written vivdly with the help of adjectives and adverbs.