The true story of the Little Red Riding Hood (from the wolf’s, David’s, point of view)
- 作者： Eunice Hui Nap Yi
- 寫作年級： P6
- 寫作日期： 2009-12
- 學校： Hong Kong And Macau Lutheran Church Ming Tao Primary School
Everybody knows the story of the Little Red Riding Hood but nobody knows the real story. Nobody has ever heard my side of the story. I’m the wolf, David Wolf.
Way back in once upon a time, I was playing in the garden. I saw a girl. Her name was Little Red Riding Hood. She was going to visit her grandma.
I knew her grandma was dead and I didn’t want her to be unhappy, so I acted as her grandma sleeping in the bed. Unluckily, Little Red Riding Hood discovered I was a wolf, so she hit me fiercely. I ran out quickly and I met a hunter. He shot at me. Luckily, I escaped from the hand of the hunter. I ran into the jungle and disappeared.
So they made me the cruel wolf which ate the Little Red Riding Hood’s grandma.
老師評語
This is a piece of creative writing with good and interesting ideas.
You have written many
good connectives e.g. so, and, Unluckily, Luckily;
good adverbs e.g. fiercely, quickly to describe the action correctly and lively.
some good vocabulary e.g. escaped from
good phrases e.g. Way back in once upon a time, escaped from the hand of the hunter
You’ve made an effort to do your work. This is a nice piece of work. I enjoyed reading your story. Keep it up!!